my quick trip to paradise

Last summer my family and I packed our bags and headed our way for sunny Alcudia in Mallorca. We were there for one week and time flew by fast. The whole week was fun and spectacular, but I want to tell you about the one day we went to Cap de Formentor. Cap de Formentor is a mountain range and it forms the eastern end of Mallorca’s Formentor peninsula.

One day my parents decided to rent a car so we could visit Palma and Cap de Formentor. We left our hotel in the morning. It was a beautiful day, the sun shone and there were no clouds in the sky. My dad drove the car up through the hills. The road was small and tortuous. It was scary because we had to drive on the edge of the road. The view was beautiful, I was in seventh heaven. We saw the sea on one side and on the other side there were rocks full of mountain goats. Finally, after a long drive, we arrived at our destination. We were probably at one of the highest points of the Cap de Formentor. I stepped out of the car and I was shocked. It was gorgeous and stunning and the air, was or at least it seemed to be, so much fresher. We visited the Formentor Lighthouse and around it there were herds of mountain goats. I even took a picture with one next to me.

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View from the Formentor Lighthouse.

After an hour that we had spent there we decided to drive to Palma. On our way down the mountains I spotted a bay where the water was turquoise near the beach. It was breathtaking the water was radiant and splendid. I insisted that we have to go there and so we did. My dad parked the car. From the parking lot we had to walk down the hill and there was a small path there which was full of stones and it didn’t look safe. We walked about one kilometer and the walking was really hard because the path was more like an obstacle course than a path. After the long and tough walk it was refreshing to get into the water and it felt like the water washed everything off me, it was so pure.


The bay where we went swimming.

That place was a paradise for me. I loved every minute of it and I felt that I was on top of the world. One day I will take my own kids there with me.

  1. #1 by Mrs. Puhakka on January 25, 2015 - 8:08 pm

    Contents: Excellent
    A beautiful story with fantastic details! In order to develop as a writer, try to avoid using the word ‘so’! Instead of saying ‘so pure’ why not spice it up with a little metaphor or poetry instead = ‘pure as holy water’ or ‘pristine and pure’…

    Media: Very good
    I wanted to see the goats! 🙂

    Grammar: Excellent

  2. #2 by Miss Vuorimaa on January 8, 2015 - 4:25 pm

    It really sounded like you have been in paradise! I liked that you told a lot about one special day there. You write fluently and it’s easy to read. You have an excellent vocabulary and no big mistakes. The title could be more interesting so people would like to read your post. In any case I would love to read more your stories. Great job Maria! 🙂

    • #3 by Mrs. Puhakka on January 8, 2015 - 5:32 pm

      You really know how to sing her praises! However, try to be a bit more specific. What was excellent about the vocabulary? Perhaps you could have commented the location itself too…
      – SOUNDS like
      – more OF your stories

  3. #4 by hegelius on December 22, 2014 - 12:09 pm

    Nice story. It was easy to read. Your text layout was great. I would like to visit a place which you told.

    • #5 by Mrs. Puhakka on January 8, 2015 - 5:07 pm

      You need to expand your comment in order to be constructive. What could be done better next time? Why would you like to visit the location?
      – STRUCTURE = rakenne, layout = visuaalinen ulkonäkö
      – you told ABOUT

    • #6 by hegelius on January 18, 2015 - 6:06 pm

      Great story. It was easy to read. Your text layout was great and structure was good. You had chosen beautiful photos in your story. I think you would use more idioms in your text. I would like to hear more what else you saw in Mallorca but that place which you described was interesting. I have never been in Mallorca but now you described so well Cap de Formentor it was nice to visit there. In any case nice job!

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