Spanish Experience

Two summers ago we visited Spain for two weeks. The first week we stayed in Barcelona. In Barcelona we had rented an apartment. We had our own swimming pool and our apartment was quite big. The apartment had three rooms and luckily the air conditioning worked well because the weather outside was very warm and sunny. Our apartment was close to a subway station so it didn’t take long to go to downtown.

The food in Barcelona was actually quite good. There were some places I loved and at least one that I didn’t. For example the place I loved was Hard Rock Cafe and then there was one place on a downtown side alley that was awful. I ordered chicken and it was partly raw and it didn’t taste very good. My stepfather ordered some kind of local sausages and I have to say that even seeing it made me sick.

We rented a car in Barcelona and drove to Benidorm. Benidorm had huge skyscrapers, but some of them weren’t completely finished. Our apartment wasn’t very great. It was near the beach and it had a good view, but what it didn’t have was working air conditioner and it was very hot inside the room. The apartment was dirty and there was dust all over the place. You couldn’t sleep at night because it was terribly hot and the upper floor residents had a party and it was extremely noisy. Luckily the owner was kind enough to return our money so we could change the hotel.

The view from our hotel room balcony. (C) Pekka T.

The view from our hotel room balcony. (C) Pekka T.

The beach in Benidorm was huge and there were thousands of tourists and local people. The sand on the beach was extremely hot. You couldn’t walk there without shoes. The sea was crystal blue and very beautiful. There were many bars and shops full of tourists  along the beach. The shops in Benidorm really didn’t have anything worth buying, just tourist junk, but it was fun to see what the local shops were selling.

We also visited a local amusement park called Terra Mitica. It was huge and exciting and there were different theme areas, for example Roman and Greek, where the setting was similar to a Roman or Greek village. I went to several rides. Some of them were really scary. In Finland we don´t have nothing like that. The roller coasters went up and down in such a speed that after a while you felt dizzy.

Amusement Park Terra Mitica near Benidorm. (C) Pekka T.

Amusement Park Terra Mitica near Benidorm. (C) Pekka T.

All in all the trip was good and everybody in my family was happy we went there. For me the best part was laying on the beach drinking soda and taking a swim when it came too hot. I definitely would like to go back to Spain in the future.

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  1. #1 by Mrs. Puhakka on January 28, 2015 - 9:21 am

    Contents: Very good
    Be as informative as you can with your topic sentence, “Two summers ago my family visited Spain for two weeks and it was quite the experience.” Then your readers will now what where when why… and will know what to expect from your story.

    Your problem is that you area too modest and FINNISH to spice up your story! Your job is to entertain readers so never say the trip was GOOD, it was FANTASTIC! Why would you even write about it otherwise? You write English so fluently, but work on your creative writing skills. Use idioms, fancy vocabulary, metaphors and ALL your senses to build a truly intriguing story.

    Media: Excellent

    Grammar: Excellent
    – A Spanish Experience (I love your title!)
    – actually quite good, not very good = this kind of basic vocabulary does not earn you any extra points, build your vocabulary! http://www.thesaurus.com/browse/delicious?s=t
    – one place = vague -> be more specific! Why didn’t you like it?
    – very beautiful = http://www.thesaurus.com/browse/beautiful?s=t

  2. #2 by MikkiS on December 20, 2014 - 1:08 pm

    Great story! You have described things well like your apartment and food. You maybe could have replaced word “good” to something else.

    • #3 by Mrs. Puhakka on January 8, 2015 - 5:01 pm

      You are quite right, diverse, rich vocabulary is important! For a more constructive comment, dig even deeper and perhaps comment the location itself!

      – things = vague, what do you mean by things?
      – replaced … WITH something else

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