My trip to fuengirola

I travelled to Fuengirola last Christmash with my friend Niklas. We stayed at a hotel which was very nice. The service and food where great. We stayed there for fifeteen days.

The weather in Fuengirola was very warm and sun was shining. Fuengirola was a beautiful place, but you shouldn´t walk around at night because there are a lot of criminals. At daytime, you don´t have to be worried about the criminals.

We did a lot of things there such as skateboarding which is an awesome extreme sport. There was very good skatepark which was made out of concrete. If you don´t like skateboarding there are other things you can do such as swimming or go to the zoo. Beaches where very beautiful and water was blue and very warm. In the zoo where a lot of rare animals such as white gorilla and Komodo Dragon which was three meter long and weight one hundred and fifty kilograms.

All in all, i loved that place. There were very nice people there and I would go there again.

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  1. #1 by Mrs. Puhakka on February 9, 2014 - 3:57 pm

    Contents: Good
    You have listed plenty of wonderful things to do in Fuengirola, however, there is hardly any description going on. Try to use all your senses next time and more colorful vocabulary! The whole story could have been about skating (with a little research), that is unique and intriguing! You have many strengths, just try to utilize them better.

    Media / sources: Room for improvement
    You could try to make an effort.

    Grammar: Satisfactory
    – Christmas
    – where = missä, were = olivat
    – fifteen (use the ABC proofread button to check for spelling mistakes!)
    – THE sun was shining
    – day time
    – or GOING to the zoo
    – THE beaches THERE were beautiful
    – THE water
    – THERE WERE a lot of rare animals IN THE ZOO (kun jossain on jotain, aloita muodollisella subjektilla ‘there’ ja laita paikan määre loppuun SPOTPA)
    – three meterS
    – i = I (always!)

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