Turkish People Are Friendly

It was Tuesday and my family and my cousin’s family were leaving to Turkey. It was 6.am when we came to the airport, so we all were really tired and sleepy. We ate some breakfast and drank cups of coffee. Then it was time to go trough the security check and chill couple of minutes until our flight leaves. Ten minutes before the takeoff my cousin decides to go into a bathroom and because of that we almost missed our flight but luckily we made it.

We got to Turkey a couple of hours after the takeoff and the first thing we all noticed was that there was hot, like really hot. No one really cared about that but still it was so hot that it was worth mentioning. We took a buss from the airport to get to our hotel. There was a water park right next to our hotel so that was a big plus, I mean who wouldn’t want to go to a water park when it’s like 40 degrees Celcius. 6 days straight we were just laying on the beach and swimming but the last day we wen’t to the city to buy some gifts and stuff for our friends or relatives. All the locals were so friendly there. They smiled and they asked about you and your country and all kinds of things. One guy even played us Finnish national anthem and that was really amusing. Over all it was a good trip. I recommend Turkey for everyone.

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  1. #1 by Mrs. Puhakka on February 6, 2014 - 4:49 pm

    Contents: Satisfactory
    Why is your topic friendly Turkish people and then you get to that part in the last two sentences of your essay? You need a theme and then stick to it – introduce why you think Turkish people are friendly in the first paragraph, compare them to Finns in the second and conclude by summarizing exactly how friendly you think they are. You need to focus and improve your structure + avoid spoken English. Human beings have 5 senses and using all of them when describing something makes your text more intriguing.

    Media / sources: Room for improvement

    Grammar: Good
    – leaving FOR Turkey
    – 6 a.m.
    – we were ALL really tired (=liikkuva määre, laita sinne mihin laittaisit ‘not’ sanan)
    – chill (slang) = relax FOR A couple of minutes BEFORE our flight WOULD LEAVE
    – deciDED
    – IT was hot (käytä muodollista subjektia ‘it’ kun kuvailet säätä)
    – bus
    – who DOESN’T LIKE GOING to a water park when it’s ABOUT 40 C (avoid using ‘like’, it is slang)
    – THE Finnish national anthem

  2. #2 by lauragronlund on January 27, 2014 - 9:52 pm

    Your story is interesting and it was nice to read it. Because of your blog, i would definetly wanna visit in Turkey. You have good details in the story and it also made me miss warm weather and sunbathing. It would have been a shame if you guys have missed your takeoff, but luckily you didn’t! I have heard so much good things about Turkey and turkish people. Nice blog!

    • #3 by Mrs. Puhakka on January 31, 2014 - 8:25 am

      No suggestions for what could be done better for next time? You are very encouraging in your comment 🙂
      – i = I
      – defINITELY
      – wanna = want to
      – vit __ Turkey (no preposition!)
      – if you guys HAD missed your takeoff (konditionaalilauseen sivulause = imperfekti)
      – so MANY good things (asiat voi laskea, joten many vs. so much water, ei laskettavissa)
      – Turkish (capitalized!)

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